Too into the character’s head? Sometimes you need to back out.
I delved into one of my old manuscripts because I’m rewriting the story into something different, using concepts, characters, etc though. But man, I didn’t realize how AT LENGTH I used to go on about what the character was thinking. She’d be giving her whole life story through her head, triggered by looking at a freakin’ shoe.
Internal thought’s what brings a deeper emotional connection to the character–definitely important. But just as important are their actions, what they DO. So next time you’re ready to explain their entire life’s tale through the thoughts in their head, pull back and parse. Consider, are they really going to have the time to muse on this?